opinions please!

[WAaaaH]

ok so this is the first time anyone would have seen my writting ..and im just keen on what you lot think of it..good or bad !! ...



Cold shudder



The Lines have faded

Happily merged to give no way out

Overstepped and Underachieved

Backswept to the start

As my body is pulled apart

Seeking a million answers, yet only find few

This twisted fate, I already knew

The negativity of inner thoughts

Displayed through questions that distort



I close my eyes

And feel my own demise

The domination of spirit,

Mind and courage

Im breaking up under

Another cold shudder



I can hear the whispers

Of words that run miles

Through my head

The words you once spoke

Never really seemed like a joke

I can feel the walls crumbling

All around me, Tumbling to the floor

Why could I never see?

The pain you could do to me



I close my eyes

And feel my own demise

The domination of spirit,

Mind and courage

Im breaking up under

Another cold shudder



I remember when

When I see your smile

Like the sea it swam to my heart

Its what I dreamed for all the while

Yet every wave crashed

Stumbled before me

Washed up like the feelings

We no longer have

Although I still …



Close my eyes

And feel my own demise

The domination of spirit,

Mind and courage

Im breaking up under

Another cold shudder



I don’t wonna waste my time

With fake blessings

And feelings I used to have

The sea was once full with the love

That flowed through our veins

Now its empty, found cracks

Overflowed and unneeded



I close my eyes

And feel my own demise

The domination of spirit,

Mind and courage

Im breaking up under

Another cold shudder



Frozen feelings

And icy thoughts

Another Cold shudder…





and heres also a little taster of another song im working on ..





Inside me



So many people have tried

To look inside me, discover me

Although they never know

That what they see is really me.

And what I hide I hide for you

You don’t know what I could do

Journeys to discover what’s inside

End in suffering that never resides

Too many times ive held on

Too many times ive been wrong

I can only learn from mistakes

And mistakes are all I make.

----------Colchester la la la ----------

Edited by: WAaaaH  at: 5/27/03 11:50:44 am

[droolymutt]

very intense stuff, WAaah....





where does that all come from?