need some beta-reading of some lyrics

[yidneth]

does it makes sense?

i have not much game to add or quit words considering the music





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Some might think I've lost, spoiled it all, done all wrong

But I am relying on one last hope

And I (and I...) will leave and find my way to you



as evening darkens into night

and blackness falls to break/undermine my will

before deciding where to lead (from here)

to wake tomorrow

in that dream (that) i'm by your side





and if it sux LOL i also will be very grateful you tell lol

XD

[AQUARIAN AGE]

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I did real @#%$,

you said that´s it,

it was all wrong.

(I´ll write a song)

Hear what I feel,

(can this be real?)

Come hold me tight,

it is still right.

Lets have some drinks

(your breath real stinks!)

come hold me tight

(is it still night?)

Give me your love,

(I´ll be above?!)

don´t let me creep

(I fall asleep!)



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